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Years ago, my town was a beautiful place.Many trees around my town.Water in the river is extremely clean and many fish swimming in it happily.The houses are low and the streets are narrow. Although people's life is different,they felt very happy. But now,tall buildings here and there, numbers of cars on the roads.And you can find stores anywhere. However the environment is very dreadful.Many trees were cut down and less than before. Because of the water become dirty,the fishes are died out.Take the reasons above,it needs to be handled immediately.