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First, I expect to visit YunNan provence with my family . As is konwn all , YunNan is a beautiful place . Second, I want to play basketball with my friends every day. Then, i will learn English for my highschool. Well,this is my all schduel for sunmmer holiday.What do you think ?Oh, my best friend,I miss you.
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