从句使用不熟练;作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累。
First, I expect to visit YunNan provence which is admired by lots of people with my family. As we all know, YunNan is a beautiful place. Second, I want to play basketball with my friends every day. Then, I will learn English for my studying of highschool. Well,this is my summer plan.What do you think ?Oh, my best friend, I miss you.
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