若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累。
First, I expect to visit YunNan provence which is admired by lots of people with my family. As we all know, YunNan is a beautiful place. Second, I want to play basketball with my friends every day. Then, I will learn English for my studying of highschool. Well,this is my scheme for the summer holiday. What do you think ?Oh, my best friend, I miss you.
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