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First, I expect to visit YunNan provence which is admired by lots of people with my family. As we all know, YunNan is a beautiful place. Second, I want to play basketball with my friends every day. Then, I will learn English for my studying of highschool. Well,this is my scheme for the summer holiday. What do you think ?What about you? I am looking forward to you.
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