文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;不能熟练使用过渡词,基本没有衔接词。
I have a best friend girl who is one of friends. When it was first time that I had met she, I fall in love with her. So, I composed with he every day, while is very happy! how to that he become my girlfriend? I said to she that I love you. Can you get my girlfriend? I would have been composing with you.