从句使用不熟练;希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;不能熟练使用过渡词,基本没有衔接词。
I have a well-behaved friend girl who is one of friends. When it was the first time that I had met she, I fall in love with her. So, I composed with he every day, while is more than happy! how to that she became my girlfriend? I said to she that I love you. Can you get my girlfriend? I would have been composing with you.