高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

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My hometown in shanxi provice, there were many trees and clear river can see fish in last years ago, people live in the simple and poor life ,house was old the street was narrow,but now there are many high building and large mansion,all kind of cars in the street, the enviroment become serious with the industy development,the fish dispear with the trees decreaseing, it's ergent that we resolve the enviroment polluted.