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The most interesting place A lot of people thinks that the most interesting place of their hometown must be the most important city in their country.just like beijin .Beijin,There is no dobut that the most interesting place of my hometown for the foreign friend visiting. There is lots of rensons.First of all,beijin,where is the most important city in my hometown.beijin is the capital of our country.Second,beijin have long time history,that is the capital of much history times of our country.Then,beijin have a lot of trave area for the foreign people visiting.just like the great wall.Last,beijin is the famous diet cultuure. Taking all these of factors into consideration,we naturally come to the conclusion that the most interesting place of my hometown must be beijin.