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My hometown is Anhui,Hefei.I think is a beautiful place,expecialy the Baohe Park.The park not only have beautiful scenery but also very interesting.Every time in holiday which attracts a large number of vistors. First,there are lots of old trees and reraly flowers which can board your horizon in agriculture.More inportantly,this wonderful things will get you in a good mood.Second,you will learn many ancient histories from this famous ancient architecture.In some significant holidays,there are also have some memorable activities to miss this hero -Baogong.Third,do not complain that I did not tell you the snack in the park are dilicious.I bet,you will deeply absorbed in these tasty and colorful food. What do you think about this.I suppose that you also can not waiting like me.In a word,it is deverse you to see.
