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注意:字数:100左右。可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。
增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中能使用多样的词汇表达,也能较好的使用一些高级词汇;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
As well is known, shopping on the internet is fashion today. Shopping on the internet has become a commonplace in our life. Consumers can buy everthing they need. I insist that shopping online has advantages and disadvantage. I have ideas about shopping on the internet. First, shopping online is very convenience. People don't wast time to choose their like in shop. Second, you can search hundreds of shops in one hour. However, Shopping on the internet also has disadvantage. First, you can't touch, feel or taste them. So, you don't like it when you receive it. Second, Online payment is not secure. So, you can choose you like way of shopping.