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Welcome to my beautiful hometown, which has a great of amazing scenes. Fisrly,I'd like to introduce the Great wall, this constrution is the reflection of history. If you love a different culture and civilization,you can go there and find a lot of historical remains. Secondly, whether you like or not, travel to China, you must go to the Tian An Men. I would like to take you to see there because that the place is Chinese started, Maozhedong was declare that the PRC was founded in 1949. Inside of Tian An Men ,Maozhedong's body keeping completely,so traveler can visiting the great man. Lastly, as my friend,I will invite you to my home, it is in Qingyuan, Guangdong,and also have a many of beautiful spots. Such as Lianzhou under ground river, it is mean a river of under the ground, it have colorful lights,the lights reflect to the water,you will see a colorful river. I think the 3 spots is not enough to you, if you have the rest of time, I can get you more amazing scene spots. I have expected you
