句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用;高级词汇使用贫乏,注意一下个别拼写错误;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
It's indiligent to conclud what to see or what to hear firstly. The reasons are as follow. Firstly, to see is not to believe. For example, a man walked along the street, suddenly, an old woman fell down when she walked beside the man. The man helping the old woman to stand up while a passer-by coming to them. If the passer-by just sees the man holding the old woman rather knows what the thing happened completely. Whether the passer-by would consider it's the man who push the old woman down? Maybe the passer-by will.Secondly, If a girl heard her boy friend saying "I love you" on the phone to other's people, will she believe her boy friend doesn't love her anymore? If the girl just believe what she heard but not to ask who that be. Will she break up with her boyfriend? Maybe the boy just told to his mother that he love her. In my opinion, it's stupid to conclud what you hear or what you see immediately. To know what the whole thing happened is really important.
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