采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;单词拼写很棒,可考虑增加高级词汇的使用量;可适当增加几条从句。
I felt extremely delighted to hear that you will come to my hometown,which is more than beautiful. Therefore,I want to say,There are two reasons for my favorite hometown.Initially,it has mountains and rivers which is green.What is more,there are lots of special of buildings,giving us a kind of best friendship.Last but not least, the people here are friendly who is easy to life together. In short,you can try to come here.