请作者增加高级词汇的使用,不过单词拼写做的很好;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文章层次较为清晰。
My favorite sport Everybody have hobby, i have many hobby, but i like play football best. A football was seen by me by accident. It's so nice that i played with my friends on the way home. It's such a interested sport. Since then, i began to play it. The more practise, the better i can do. Now it is my favorite. I play football as soon as i am free. We are playing football when there have no class. Sometimes, there are many matches between our school and others school. Bakehanmu is my favorite player. He is a English man. I hope that i can become a player like him when i grow up. The sport give me interest. Because it's so nice, more and more children like it very much.