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I‘m glad to hear that you are coming to China recently. China is a charming place to travel and I am excited to show you some of the popular places. First is The Great Wall which is famous all of the world.In ancient times, the reason for built it is that hold the army of other country back. At that time,built it sames an imporsible mission.lunckily,t he ancient built it succeed so that we can see it. The second you have to visit is that the water town in south of China. The south of China is a place where people don't want leave. There have many beautiful house localed by the said of river. The history of there is very charming too. China is a place which have very suprise to show the world. It have varies sight waiting you to find , if you can, I have a suggestion to you is that you could stay a long time to feel different from different part of China. Wish you a great exprience.
