从句使用很不错,再接再厉;文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词;文章词汇表达丰富,高级词汇使用较丰富,但拼写检查要重视。
We have known that investing have risk and how to optimize your investments is important. There are lots of methods to reduce your investment risk, avoiding to put all eggs in one basket is the most important of investment. For example, you can make money RMB10,000 a month, in which RMB200 be spend on your daily life, the rest of RMB800 is used to investing some value-added fileds. I suggest you to puchase some bank production using of RMB500 and to deposit RMB200 in your bank account, the remining RMB100 could be invested into stock.