从句使用很不错,再接再厉;文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词;文中词汇表达灵活多样,也能较丰富地使用高级词汇。
We have known that investing have risk and how to optimize your investments is important. There are lots of methods to reduce your investment risk, avoiding to put all eggs in one basket are the most important of investment. For example, you can make money RMB10,000 a month, in which RMB200 spend on your daily life, the rest of RMB800 is used to investing some value-added fields. I suggest you to puchase some bank production using of RMB500 and to deposit RMB200 in your bank account, the remining RMB100 could be invested into stock.