增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中词汇丰富度不足,拼写检查也要重视;全文结构不够严谨,文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词。
To:sales-department@hotmail.com From:wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date:December 23,2008 Dear Mr.Johnson: Our company had aleady received 3000 packages product of No.35 order from your company. but according to our singing of the No.35 order, the number of product should be 3500 packages,we still not received remainding 500 packages up to now.please kindly check your product list. We are looking forward to your early reply! Best Wishes Wang Haiyang