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How to improve school safety Since 2010, our country is facing a large amount of campus violence. Pratically all the students who had been victims before that had left a terrible memory about their school life. Consequently, to tackle the issue, what should we do? To start with, I hold the view that we all ought to protect ourselves carefully. Do not be a person that everyone hates, or else you were likely to be attacked by them. Nevertheless, it is important to improve the campus' safety system. The leaders of the school must hire more security guards so that the students could live in a safe environment.