从句偏少,建议平时练习中加强从句的练习;作者词汇基础不错,注意极个别的拼写错误;结构不严谨,几乎没有使用衔接词,上下文衔接欠流畅。
Now,with the developement of the internet,more and more people start to depend on the internet.So,there are some different views about it. some thinks the internet is important and useful.On the one hand,using the internet which can make study and work be more effective.On the other hand,we can konw the latest news from all over the world by the internet.But others don't think so.They think the internet is harmful.It makes a bad difference to teenagers.Being infatuated with network games which makes them have less interest on study. I also have some opinions about the internet.I think every coins have two sides.first ,it has advantages.we can ues the internent go through information,besides,we also can relax ourselves by the internen to listen to music.But it's disadvantages are more.we may do some illegal things by it.So,we should use the internet more rationally.