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Zhao guangli is my best friend. She is a beautiful girl. She is twenty eight years old .She was born on Rizhao Shangdong province.She is an honest girl. we can see each other every weekend. Last Sunday we went to go shopping. She bought a beautiful skirt and she said that she like my skirt. I am so surprised.