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Now many persons realize that we need to manage money matters. If you don't that, your money will lose slowly.So you have to learn to invest. But you need to know much knowledge on investing,you can study by yourselves or seek advice from expert. In fact practice is an best way to accumulate exprience,no any way can instead of the method. Whatever you study ,you must remember that it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.You need to invest your money to different fields,for instance stock,gold and so on.Like this you will afford less dangerous and get more money.