句式变化多样,句法方面做的很棒;请作者增加高级词汇的使用,不过单词拼写做的很好;恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒。
Many persons are busy every day, they maybe never consider the meaningful of life. As a human we can't like animal the same, sometimes we should stop our step and have a rest,and then think a lot why are we busy. What are we working for? I think few people think about the problem, if you don't spend time on yourself, your life will fill with difficulties and troubles. Until your life ending,you are also a loser. So we leave some time to think about the meaningful of life, we will get more or we will succeed.