2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

过渡词和衔接词不饱和，文章行文较为流畅；文中单词拼写做的不错，另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了；适当增加一些从句的使用，会为文章添彩。

if you have time to come to my hometown, i will take you to zhongshan. because i think zhongshan is a beautiful city. although zhongshan is not big, it is name as the comfortable to live. i think there are many place for us to visit. from my personal angle alone, i think the famous place is sunzhongshan's house. because sun is the father of china.