2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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nowadays there are more and more goods have excessive packaging phenomen.supose you buy a beautiful cloth ,they will pack tow or more packaging. no one hand,pepole like performance external,that the gift will bring a sensitive.pepole pursue the physition .no other hand ,with the pepoles appriciation increasing,they can create more and more beautiful things. in my views,we are supposed to liettle packaging.if we pay much for the excessive packaging ,then we would waste more martirals.