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文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词；作者应增加从句的使用；文中高级词汇的使用需加强，另外要注意词汇拼写的检查。
My hometown is XuZhou,in the middle of china.everybodies knows,the middle parts of china are warm and comfortbale weather.and i believe the natural cences are the greatest views. In xuzhou,there are some beautiful sences for a couple of years.for example,the yunlong lake,yunlong mountain,the peng zoo,the plant garden.the monkeies garden etc.all of streets are same,but these plants have their character or funcyion,because every garden has itself gardeners,so each garden has its distinguishment. many sences are free.a lot of guards patroled a couple of thimes each day,so those are safe places.and in this world which thought fitness is the important thing,i usually go these places where i mentioned, i like exercise. i hope they will love these places.
