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Emerging from this picture is an ironic scene that a doctor ask a man, injuring his one finger, to stay at hospital for one month, and to make his elbow entirely wrapped in gauze, moreover, they claim to be responsible for the patient. Apparently, these treat for the patient is not necessary. It is deeply rooted in the mind of general public that doctor as a angel help the patient in pained. But this public view is still true? Cases against this opinion are abundant and with easy reach. Firstly, it is not surprise to see some patients spend a great quantity money for a cold. It is not rare to notice that a doctor for patient use many drug superfluous. What the hell happened to the doctor? Traditionally, they loss the sense of the morality of career is considered. The real reason, in fact, may be just be diverse: Aren’t the sense of the morality of career swallowed by their greediness? How can we put an end to this problem? I hold the view that we need legislation from department concerned, intervention from medical groups, and supervision from the mass media. Apart from we also need make the doctor have an awareness that they would be unemployment if they don’t follow the principle of doctor.