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Communication is the basic skill of people,we need to communicate with the others. In the morning we will say "morning" to our familly member,and then we go to work ,when we arrive company,we will greet with our colleges.when we begin to work ,we will communicate with our customers.So we live,we need to commmunicate wite the others. With the rapid development of technology, our way of communication is more diversified.Although we are far from our friend,we can communicate with each other.
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