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Nowadays with rapidly growth of advance science and economy, wealth is play a important role in society. For majority of people spend more and more time on chasing money. This phenomenon replaces traditional values. Making friends seems to be more difficult than before. Some people look for somebody who is richman or famous person's children. All kinds of the opinions are surrounded by wrong values.
