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A strong will is a crucial guarantee to succeed. It plays an important role inn overcoming obstacles. People have strong wills tend to be optimistic when they meet chanlleges, and the attitude of optimism contributes to succeed. Only people with strong wills can they achieve great missions. For example, Chairman Mao of China, who persisted taking showers with cold water, even it was chilling winter. He was a man with a strong will.And eventually, he became one of the greatest people in the world. Albert Einstan, who experimented and finally figured out the substance which was suitable to be lamp filament by trial and error. I suppose such a principle works on students,too. No one student can be a useful person without working hard.