文中有几处拼写错误,应增加高级词汇的使用;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中基本没有过渡词和衔接词,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
Dear classmates, Since hearing that you are bored about english,I would like to share something with you .English is the most popular word in the world .It is the english that we must learn .Not only is it play a important role in our examination,but in our life .Learning english also can improve other subjects .Therefore ,It is meaningful to study english .As to how to learn it,I want to give you some advice . First,remember words .Every scentence is made up words .Only by remembering it in mind,we can write more wonderful artical .Secend,practice frequently as you can as possible .As the saying gose,"practics make perfect". I hope these advice are useful for you .Wise your english more and more improve .