增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累高级词汇;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
I have a good friend.He is a beautiful boy,but he is a shy boy.He is six years old and younger than me.He is very tall and has a short hair. My good friends,Daming.His favourite hobby is play basketball on our school playground.I like playing with Daming after school.We ofen go to the beach with our parents.He is friendly to me and always help me in English troubles.