词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;文章上下文衔接自然;简单句偏多了。
i have a good friend ,his name is Chun yuan ,we play together since in childhood.his is too shy to talk to girls .although he is handsome .when we grow up .i learn a lot from psychology .and i will treat my friend as my family members as well .i do like my good friend