句法很棒,若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;作者词汇量积累不错,高级词汇积累较少;恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒。
Today is the first workday which since spring festival. I got up early to work. Outside is cold and the sky is gray and infrequent people on the road. I had just caught the bus at the bus stop. It is different from normal that a few people were in the bus. When i got off, I see the stop which i often eat breakfast is closed. A sign on the door, it said 'sorry, everybody, we are resting, if you miss us, please go here in Feb-five'. In about ten minutes, i found a dumpling shop which has many people waited for. I hurry to the crowd at the last.Soon my colleague, second brother joined us. When we are in the middle of crowd, my colleague first brother and big teacher arrived. They said "can you bring us some food for breakfast". I looked at them and smiled then said 'brothers, all of the stop is closed unless this one, so please tell me what food do you like' After that two of my colleague arrived too. They told us what food did they like. At last we bought lots of food in a big bag.