语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者词汇基本功很好,但在高级词汇的积累上还要努力;从句和复杂句用的不错,但部分句子还有一些小问题。
living in an age when the adolescents are lake of the neccessary guidance and supervision we can never faul to figure out the fact that teenagers are become especially self-concious under this circumstance the youngsters are more likely to blieve in what they have listened or seen instend of thinking twice before drawing their conclusions which is pathetically and undoubtedly considered controversial or even unreasonable. the reasion why i insist on the viewpoint that we should never directly and irresponsibly come to conclusions only by listening or seeing mainly lie in the following two aspects to begin with it is a invariable law to every existence in the world that nothing will stay still even for just one seconed.so are the things happening around us .what we see or listen may bejust some particunari
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