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My school is in Sanya, Hainan. I love my school, because my school is beautiful. And I think, you will like it. My school had a teaching building, a very big playground, two dormitories, a comprehensive building, two guardhouses, an office building, and a garden. Our teaching building has four flours. My school is close to the Skyline Government Compound. I am in Class 3, Grade 3. My classroom is on the second flour. Of course, my school had a name: Skyline Phoenix School. Now, I have three major subjects: Chinese、 Maths and English; four minor subjects: Art、 Music、 IT and P.E.. This is my school, do you like it?