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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36941
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
用户的作文(系统评分52.5分
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语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者英语功底扎实,可适当调整文中从句数量;高级词汇使用贫乏,注意一下个别拼写错误。

用户练习作文:

I have an army of friends, but they are not same, for me , quite a few friends are really friends, for example —— my mom, also, she is my family, but I can say anything to her, and I trust she very much since I am a child. actually, I don't want to make her disappinted, but I always do it worng, it is a betray to our friendship. I hope I can do something correct to make she happy, so I learn English, I just want to make she know I will do my best for she. About her looks , she has black hair, it's beatiful when I am younger, but now, she is older, so she losing a lot of hair by some reason, her face is not smooth any more, when I am grow up, she is grow up. But if God is real, I hope he can make my mom become a younger lady.

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