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I have an army of friends, but they are not same, for me , quite a few friends are really friends, for example —— my mom, also, she is my family, but I can say anything to her, and I trust she very much since I am a child. actually, I don't want to make her disappinted, but I always do it worng, it is a betray to our friendship. I hope I can do something correct to make she happy, so I learn English, I just want to make she know I will do my best for she. About her looks , she has black hair, it's beatiful when I am younger, but now, she is older, so she losing a lot of hair by some reason, her face is not smooth any more, when I am grow up, she is grow up. But if God is real, I hope he can make my mom become a younger lady.