Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中从句数量不足;能较灵活地使用部分学术词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下。
From the diagram we can see that,in 2011 , with the increase of the degree of the education,the people owing a low academic degree certificates may justifiably be oppressed by their earnings. In 2011,there is a giant deviation of the unemployment rate and earninig from the average.The man who, has a less than high school diploma, the unemployment rate is up to the 14.1%,and earns only about 451$ one week.On the contrary,for the doctor ,the unemployment rate is the lowest,only 2.5%,but the median weekly earning is three times or so as much as the lowest earning. Money does not grow on the trees,just like a saying goes:"no pains,no gains."It can't be denied that the low degree of education is loaded against the earnings.Every so often,the small education pays may give rise to the little money and the high education pays facilitates a good wage.