2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

从句数量稍显不足，注意增加从句和复杂句的使用；作者词汇表达比较多样，也能较好的使用一些学术词汇；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。

In contemporary society,there are more and more phenomenon about the excessive packaging.Sometimes,we eat some tasty food but feel unsafe,it's terrible. Now,most of people pay more attention to making money,and they ignore the people's health.In addition,for example,the food of the packaging is packaged very good by the productor,but the food is terrible. As far as I am concerned,excessiving packing is bad for the society,it'll do harm to the people's health.However.we should strengthen moral education.and the government must spare no effect in quitting the excessive packing.