作者词汇基本功不错,建议今后多用高级词汇;从句比例偏少,简单句稍微偏多了;文章层次较为清晰。
Good morning,my friends and teachers, Some of us students are ignoring personal safety on the way to school and back home.On the street, it is quite easy to see some students disobey the traffic rules. Sometimes. they walk backward, what's worse, they chase each oher while they are walking. Some students ride with another person at the back and talk with others while driving. Apart from that. some other students drive their bikes into motorway, which is bound to jeopardize their life security. In terms of this phenomenon, I would like to come up with some suggestions. To start with, never drive close to the cars that are turning a corner. Secondly, it's of great importance to remember the traffic rule, that is, "go at green light, stop at red light". The last advice is that walking on thepavement when you are crossing the street. Only try to follow these rules can we protect ourselves from being hurt. Therefore, let's make joint efforts to obey them. Thanks for listening!