采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中词汇表达不够丰富,高级词汇方面要多累积;复杂句采用很棒。
if my foreign friend will going to my hometown,i would like to take him to see my school.because it is full of my wonderful remerber . i will tell him my story about my school funny ,then to take him to my class and my school kind of place.meanwhile,i would go to eating dinner with him and taste to different to well food. i will share my school birth to him ,which it is leave good impression to him.my school is a long time history ,and it is lie in a betaufui place was called guilin. i love my school forever ,do you like it,welcome come to my school.