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Hello, dear friends. Welcome to Guangzhou. Let me tell you something about Guangzhou. Guangzhou, the third largest city in China, also known as Five-lamb City, Flower City and so on, serves as the capital city of Guangdong Province. This city covers a total area of 7,434 square kilometers with a population of more than ten million. Guangzhou, a famous city with a history of more than 2,200 years, is a starting port of the Silk Road on the sea in history. With the Pearl River winding its way through the city, Guangzhou enjoys a warm and wet climate. The beautiful city, well-known for its beautiful scenery, is also abundant in traveling resources. I hope you will have a good time in Guangzhou. Thank you.