单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;复杂句使用不错,句法规范;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
I have a good friend, he comes from Dongduan province, and he likes to play football, thus, he will play it when he doesn't wok. His name is Jack, he is twenty years now, and he likes smile, and he is a handsome boy, and he has a beautiful sister, and they all work in our company.