作者词汇基本功很好,高级词汇表达也比较恰当;作者在句法层面做的很棒;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
Human's life is so short that they do not accomplish every significant thing that they want to do.It is attractive to many people whether a person determines to spend much more time doing something that will outlast it.In my opinion,if a person can grasp one of lots of pursuits and work hard for it,one will gain unexpected gifts. A person who understands life’s genuine meaning should pay most attention to do something that he insists to do.There are numerous evidences that prove this theory.To demonstrate, Edison,a splendid scientist,gets indefinite admiration and respect because he invented many implements that are convenient to people tackle with complicated troubles.In addition,Helen Keller makes long-time meaningful contribution at education and civilization.It is key to her that she still holded on her belief and finished it step by step. All in all,a successful man always persist to do something following their inner mind and plan.A person who want to attach to the goal should choose the special one from many targets that he likes to do,and try his best in working it.Only in this way, can we become a great man and have a meaningful life.