有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;作者词汇表达比较灵活多变,尤其是高级词汇使用较恰当;作者句法知识扎实,可适当增加从句的使用。
When my friend went to my hometown, I would take them to visit the Confucius Temple in Qufu to feel the Chinese Confucian culture. Subsequently we will take them to go boating on the Weishan Lake to enjoy the Fishing feast. There after,we went to Shuibo Liangshan, those is birthplace of chinese famous to see Liangshan heroes party place。 After that we will go to Jinxiang County to visit deep processing of garlic, Furthermore, take a day off, and finally sent them to Jining Airport。