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My favorite sport My favorite sport is playing football.i fell in love with football by chance .when i went home,i fond a football and picked it .then i palyed football with my friend ,from Then .I deeply fell in love with it Now i always trained and joined some football race with my students . My favorite football start is , i wish i can be a professional player