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China have a lot of beautiful city,but my most love is dangshan.becauae it's my hometown,it's also a wonderful city. dangshan is famous for pear in China,there are mang pear tree,the people is liveing with plant pear tree.the people is very nice,if you go to there,you will feel at home.nad if you go to there in march,you will see pear flowers all the around,it's very beautiful.the city likes a snow flower world.