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My favorite sport My favorite sport is playing football.I fell in love with football by chance.i fond a football and picked it.Then i played football with my friend,from Then.I deeply fell in love with it Now i always trained and joined some football races with my students. My favorite football start is Beckham, I wish i can be a professional player