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I like English best.It can bring me enjoyment and success. when I was six years old ,I remember sitting close the radio, listering to my favourite English stroies and to the voice of my favourite presenters ,it seemed that they were speaking to me in person .After that ,I have found I like English . when I was ten years ,I have a dream ,it's America dream ,I hope see the whole of American.As I grow old,my intered in English grow . while I am speaking English, I will feel happy and exciting.